Chapter 1, what do you think?

I should warn you...I am very choosy about what I read. That said, you are trying 110% too hard. You are treating the reader like a child. You do not need to reveal everything in the first (extraordinarily short) chapter. Stop telling--SHOW the reader without saying it outright. Your dialogue is very forced and over-dramatic. At this point, you are at the level of a competent 15 or 16-year-old. You have a LOT of work to do.